10 Oct 2013

The Pain



'Please don't do this to me…' Maria screamed.
No one cared to listen her cry.
She felt that inevitable moment for the first time,
Where she wasn't treated the same way as before.
Pain engulfed her when they shut the door against her face,
And locked her in
To rest in that unfamiliar peace forever.

31 comments:

  1. My God! Powerful. Leaves you wondering, almost asking for more. Love this!

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  2. very emotional and deep
    keep in touch,
    www.beingbeautifulandpretty.com

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    1. thanks so much Katja. keep visiting :)

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  4. power writing ! that what it is .. !

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  5. This is so Intense..I can really feel the Pain.. :)

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    1. am glad it reached the audience the way i wanted it to be.. thanks a lot Harsha. :)

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    1. happy to see your comment. thank you Vashti. :)

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  7. The last line gives you spine chills! "To rest in that unfamiliar peace forever"

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    1. that's what I wanted. thanks for dropping by..

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  8. Amazing start..want to know more!

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  9. Amazing start..want to know more!

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    1. i dono if I can come up with a sequel cos i think somethings are better left unsaid. thanks a lot Swarn Priya :-)

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  10. To rest in that unfamiliar peace forever.... that sounds very scary and chilling!

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    1. thanks for reading. keep visiting. :)

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  11. A write that leaves a dark niggle at the end.

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  12. It is a dark poem...powerful and intriguing....leaving the reader with more questions than answers...very good rat

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    1. good to see your comment.. but i dint write as a poem but tried a 55er rats.. :)

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